Edit contract grammar #22

NovemberOrWhatever · 2024-09-01T20:15:52Z

Standardize to "Earth station"
Use Oxford comma
KSC-DF-107-Rev F number formatting
Correct capitalization
Misc style and grammar changes

Standardize to "Earth station" Use Oxford comma KSC-DF-107-Rev F number formatting Correct capitalization Misc style and grammar changes

eggrobin · 2024-09-01T21:41:29Z

GameData/Skopos/Contracts/ExperimentalComsats/intermittent_paris_moscow_tv.cfg

@@ -12,9 +12,9 @@ CONTRACT_TYPE {
  sortKey = 050
  title = Experimental Paris-Moscow Television
  // Mostly pilfered from NASA TM X-70435 p. 11-1.
-  description = <b>Program: Experimental Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=green>Required</color></b><br><br>As part of a Franco-Soviet agreement on colour television, we are considering using the space segement of the Soviet television network to relay television between Paris and Moscow.
+  description = <b>Program: Experimental Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=green>Required</color></b><br><br>As part of a Franco-Soviet agreement on color television, we are considering using the space segment of the Soviet television network to relay television between Paris and Moscow.


Let’s stick to en-GB-oxendict orthography, which is what I have used throughout; this change misses many british spellings (of colour and other words) and makes the result less consistent.

Okay, fixed

Capkirk123 · 2024-09-01T22:09:47Z

GameData/Skopos/Contracts/Level1Comsats/l1_us_tracking_ships.cfg

@@ -12,8 +12,8 @@ CONTRACT_TYPE {
  sortKey = 280
  title = US Tracking Ships - Level 1
  // Mostly pilfered from NASA SP-32 p. 740.
-  description = <b>Program: First Generation Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=blue>Optional</color></b><br><br>We would like to create "Ground stations at sea", ships equipped with unified S-band antennas to relay data from manned and unmanned scientific spacecraft. However, a ship at sea cannot have a landline connection to mission control, and existing HF radio systems are unreliable and low quality. Instead, these ships have had a satellite communications terminal installed, allowing them to relay data back to mission control via communications satellites.


"Ground stations at sea" is actually correct here, both because it is quoting something (which I should have referenced) and because the primary purpose of these ships was to function as tracking stations.

Capkirk123 · 2024-09-01T22:10:38Z

GameData/Skopos/Contracts/Level1Comsats/l1_us_tracking_ships.cfg

@@ -12,8 +12,8 @@ CONTRACT_TYPE {
  sortKey = 280
  title = US Tracking Ships - Level 1
  // Mostly pilfered from NASA SP-32 p. 740.
-  description = <b>Program: First Generation Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=blue>Optional</color></b><br><br>We would like to create "Ground stations at sea", ships equipped with unified S-band antennas to relay data from manned and unmanned scientific spacecraft. However, a ship at sea cannot have a landline connection to mission control, and existing HF radio systems are unreliable and low quality. Instead, these ships have had a satellite communications terminal installed, allowing them to relay data back to mission control via communications satellites.
-  notes = The tracking ships USNS Vanguard, Redstone and Mercury have been positioned in the Atlantic and Pacific near the equator. If they are provided with a link to shore, they will be able to use their unified S-band systems to function as a ground station. Whether you achieve this with a MEO or LEO constellation or a single GEO satellite is up to you.


Same here, this should probably say "tracking station" to indicate that it will in fact function as one, not purely as a communications station.

Capkirk123 · 2024-09-01T22:11:56Z

GameData/Skopos/Contracts/Level2Comsats/l2_soviet_tracking_ships.cfg

-  description = <b>Program: Second Generation Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=blue>Optional</color></b><br><br>We would like to create "Ground stations at sea", ships equipped with high-gain antennas to relay data from manned and unmanned scientific spacecraft. However, a ship at sea cannot have a landline connection to mission control, and existing HF radio systems are unreliable and low quality. Instead, these ships have had a satellite communications terminal installed, allowing them to relay data back to mission control via communications satellites.
-  notes = The tracking ship NIS Yuri Gagarin has been positioned in the Atlantic near Nova Scotia. If it is provided with a link to shore, it will be able to use it's high-gain antenna systems to function as a ground station. Whether you achieve this with a MEO or LEO constellation or a single GEO satellite is up to you.
+  description = <b>Program: Second Generation Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=blue>Optional</color></b><br><br>We would like to create "Earth stations at sea", ships equipped with high-gain antennas to relay data from crewed and uncrewed scientific spacecraft. However, a ship at sea cannot have a landline connection to mission control, and existing HF radio systems are unreliable and low quality. Instead, these ships have had a satellite communications terminal installed, allowing them to relay data back to mission control via communications satellites.
+  notes = The tracking ship NIS Yuri Gagarin has been positioned in the Atlantic near Nova Scotia. If it is provided with a link to shore, it will be able to use its high-gain antenna systems to function as an Earth station. Whether you achieve this with a MEO or LEO constellation or a single GEO satellite is up to you.


Same here, these ships are actually tracking stations.

Set it back to colour and clarify that tracking ships do tracking

pleroy · 2024-09-02T20:59:33Z

GameData/Skopos/Contracts/Level1Comsats/l1_ulaanbaatar_tv.cfg

@@ -11,8 +11,8 @@ CONTRACT_TYPE {
  group = skopos_telecom_group
  sortKey = 240
  title = Moscow-Ulaanbaatar Television - Level 1
-  description = <b>Program: First Generation Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=blue>Optional</color></b><br><br>Mongolia is a close ally to the Soviet Union, but much like the eastern territories of the Soviet Union, it is sparsely populated and dominated by rugged terrain. Satellite telecommunication offers a way to easily provide TV to these remote areas.
-  notes = A ground station has been built at Naran, just outside Ulaanbaatar; while it has a tracking dish, it is receive-only; television will be broadcast from Moscow.
+  description = <b>Program: First Generation Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=blue>Optional</color></b><br><br>Mongolia is a close ally to the Soviet Union, but, much like the eastern territories of the Soviet Union, it is sparsely populated and dominated by rugged terrain. Satellite telecommunication offers a way to easily provide TV to these remote areas.


I'd be tempted to remove the comma before "but" because it doesn't seem to connect independent clauses.

pleroy · 2024-09-02T21:00:50Z

GameData/Skopos/Contracts/Level1Comsats/l1_us_tracking_ships.cfg

-  description = <b>Program: First Generation Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=blue>Optional</color></b><br><br>We would like to create "Ground stations at sea", ships equipped with unified S-band antennas to relay data from manned and unmanned scientific spacecraft. However, a ship at sea cannot have a landline connection to mission control, and existing HF radio systems are unreliable and low quality. Instead, these ships have had a satellite communications terminal installed, allowing them to relay data back to mission control via communications satellites.
-  notes = The tracking ships USNS Vanguard, Redstone and Mercury have been positioned in the Atlantic and Pacific near the equator. If they are provided with a link to shore, they will be able to use their unified S-band systems to function as a ground station. Whether you achieve this with a MEO or LEO constellation or a single GEO satellite is up to you.
+  description = <b>Program: First Generation Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=blue>Optional</color></b><br><br>We would like to create "tracking stations at sea", ships equipped with unified S-band antennas to relay data from crewed and uncrewed scientific spacecraft. However, a ship at sea cannot have a landline connection to mission control, and existing HF radio systems are unreliable and low quality. Instead, these ships have had a satellite communications terminal installed, allowing them to relay data back to mission control via communications satellites.
+  notes = The tracking ships USNS Vanguard, Redstone, and Mercury have been positioned in the Atlantic and Pacific near the equator. If they are provided with a link to shore, they will be able to use their unified S-band systems to function as an Earth station. Whether you achieve this with a MEO or LEO constellation or a single GEO satellite is up to you.


Oxford comma before "or a single"?

pleroy · 2024-09-02T21:09:26Z

GameData/Skopos/Contracts/ExperimentalComsats/intermittent_transpacific_tv.cfg

@@ -13,7 +13,7 @@ CONTRACT_TYPE {
  sortKey = 020
  description = <b>Program: Experimental Telecommunications Satellites (Skopos Beta)<br>Type: <color=green>Required</color></b><br><br>The development of artificial satellites opens the possibility of applying microwave radio relay technology to transoceanic links, using a “microwave repeater in the sky”. The objective for this experiment is to answer the critical questions, leaving until a later round of design the optimization of trade-offs and the development and construction of a commercial operating system.
  synopsis = Provide transpacific television for three months with 1% availability (~15 min per day).
-  notes = Earth stations with cutting-edge antennas have been built in the Kashima prefecture (Japan), and at Point Mugu (California). It should be possible to establish a transpacific link with a very small satellite.
+  notes = Earth stations with cutting-edge antennas have been built in the Kashima prefecture (Japan) and at Point Mugu (California). It should be possible to establish a transpacific link with a very small satellite.


There is an asymmetry in geographical terminology here that tickles my OCD. "Kashima prefecture" is a subdivision of Japan. Similarly, "California" is a subdivision of the USA. I'd prefer if we always used the name of the country in the parentheses, otherwise it looks a tad US-centric. For instance, I'd write "in the Kashima prefecture (Japan) and at Point Mugu, California (USA)". There are probably other instances in this file.

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NovemberOrWhatever added 2 commits September 1, 2024 16:47

GB spelling, tracking stations at sea

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Set it back to colour and clarify that tracking ships do tracking

And back to "programme" too

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